A Very Tired Fangirl :) ([info]jij) wrote,

Fic: Gotham Nocturne, Chapter 1/9 (Music of the Spheres)

Title:  Gotham Nocturne:  Chapter One
Pairing:  Clark/Bruce
Disclaimer: The boys belong to DC and to each other, but not to me.
Series Notes:  Gotham Nocturne is part of The Music of the Spheres, a combined Superman Returns/Batman Begins series. The whole series can be found here
Rating: PG
Summary:  Clark and Bruce walk through Gotham as Bruce contemplates a recent mystery;  meanwhile, two unlikely allies discuss their plans.
Word Count: 1700


Kal-El could hear the city singing.

He and Bruce Wayne were walking through Gotham, his lover's eyes lost in thought, pondering a case.  Bruce liked to take long walks through the city as he first started an investigation, liked having Clark at his side.  He said the rhythm of the city helped his subconscious mind start fitting the pieces together.

The rhythm of the city.

As they walked, Kal could hear it, the low bass beat under it all, steady as a heartbeat but immense beyond human perception.  A beat like the steady sound of dripping blood.

Sirens and screeching brakes like violins, punctuating the beat like a stab wound.  Conversation like a low and muttering choir, moving to the rhythm unawares.  It was under everything, an inexorable sound of blood and fate, each beat another step toward mortality.  Gotham's song, a nocturne of entropy.

Clark hunched his shoulders and met Bruce's smile with one of his own, focusing on the sights, on the happy faces in the crowd, the ornate architecture.  Bruce loved Gotham, and Gotham was worthy of love, Clark knew this.  He tried not to resent how Bruce's steps fell naturally into the song's tempo, tried to match Bruce's stride, to fit himself into the measure.  As Clark, he had learned how to do this.

(But Kal still heard the city singing).

: : :

Bruce Wayne touched the wrought-iron gates lightly as they turned into Robinson Park, its trees and hills frosted with new snow.  Joggers ran by, their breath pouring from them in white streamers.  Bruce glanced at Clark, walking next to him:  the puffy ski jacket, red wool mittens, a matching knitted red cap with a large pompom.  He looked entirely ridiculous, and as usual the knowledge of what was walking next to him, wrapped in eiderdown and gore-tex, warmed Bruce with possessive delight.

He hadn't mentioned the case he was pondering at all yet, and Clark didn't push him.  These long walks through the city were usually silent as Bruce soaked up the city and let his subconscious work on the case, the first delicate fitting-together of facts. 

Bruce took a moment to sit down on a bench, brushing off a layer of newly-fallen snow.  Clark sat next to him, not cuddling but close enough to touch, as Bruce stared out over the park.  Skaters twirled on the ice in patterns and Bruce's eyes followed them but were far away.

Eventually he sighed slightly, his shoulders relaxing.  This was Clark's cue that it was okay to break into his thoughts for a time.  "So what is it?"

"An incident today at the Gotham Airport.  A student pilot and his instructor crashed their Cessna.  Neither of them made it."

His partner reached out and slipped his mittened hands between Bruce's gloved fingers, tense on his knees.  "I'm sorry," Clark said, as he always did when something bad happened that he hadn't stopped.

Bruce shook his head absently, as he always did at the apology, staring out at the skaters.  After a moment, Clark said, "There's more, isn't there?"

"Wouldn't be much need of a detective otherwise, would there?"  Bruce said wryly.  His face clouded again.  "The plane had just passed inspection, and there didn't seem to be any mechanical problems.  The instructor had years of experience.  The air traffic tower could hear both of them screaming just before they crashed.  They appeared to be...fighting over the controls."

"Why?"

Bruce's frown was distant and worried.  "The tower says they just heard a lot of incoherent screaming."  Clark shuddered slightly and Bruce stood up, pulling his partner with him.  "Let's walk some more.  I think better when I'm walking."

The stroll took them down to Amusement Mile.  The boardwalk clicked underneath their feet as they made their way through the stretch of mostly-abandoned booths and attractions.  The sun was low on the horizon now, the shadows stretching long all around them from the Ferris wheel and the old wooden roller coaster.  Bits of paper--old tickets, flyers, newspaper--scudded by their feet.  It was quiet except for the low creaking of the wind through the old rides.

Bruce stopped walking for a second and just let the feeling of the area surround him.  He remembered coming here as a child--the taste of cotton candy, the music from the carousel, the way his father had pitched baseballs to win him a Gotham Knights jersey.  Everything around them was still, steeped with memories of laughter and warmth, like leaves in amber.  He smiled slightly, feeling his city hovering near them, an angel with dusty wings.

"How--how can you stand it?" Clark asked suddenly.  Startled, Bruce looked over at him.  His partner was standing with his arms wrapped tightly around himself, as if to keep himself from shivering, his eyes wary.  "I mean, what kind of city leaves an abandoned amusement park like this?  Who owns this, Bruce?  Why leave something so disturbing around?"

With a jolt as if a circuit were thrown in his brain, Bruce suddenly saw the area as Clark must see it:  the rides filled with ominous shadows, the silence and emptiness like the moment before a scream, everything desolate and abandoned.  Empty.  He put an arm around Clark and his lover leaned into him;  Bruce could feel an almost-imperceptible tremor beneath his hands.  "Stagg Industries owns most of these, I believe," he said lightly, trying not to show that he was shaken by the shift in perception.  "I guess Stagg just hasn't ever had a reason to tear them down." 

Clark's eyes remained almost glassy.  "This city," he muttered.  "It frightens me sometimes."

Bruce couldn't help but laugh just a little;  Clark twitched as the sound echoed around the boardwalk.  "Clark?"

"No," said his lover indistinctly, "Clark is okay with Gotham.  It's Kal that..."  His voice trailed off and he took a deep breath;  a gust of wind slammed the shutter of a booth loudly and they both jumped.  Clark laughed a bit shakily, and this time the sound broke the feeling of stasis for both of them.   

Bruce swung around to grab Clark's hands in his, pulling him down the boardwalk a little and then into his arms.  Clark's lips were cold but responsive;  Bruce's breath warmed them until Clark's breath was coming fast and his mittened hands were fumbling with Bruce's hair.  "So then, I gather you're not interested in exploring the Tunnel of Love?" Bruce asked.

Clark's eyes were mischievous.  "Not here, no."

: : :

On the other side of the city, Pamela Isley strolled through her greenhouse, stopping to check the lotuses for signs of blight.  The rhododendrons were close to flowering now;  she made a mental note to harvest a little of the pollen next week for the next sequence of tests. 

Being one of the top biochemists for Stagg Industries did have its perks, she mused as she brushed past some of her favorite ferns, her hands absent-mindedly caressing the delicate fronds.  They shivered at her touch and she smiled approvingly:  the genetic alterations for touch-sensitivity seemed to be coming along nicely.  Simon Stagg didn't care what she did in her spare time as long as she continued to create the cosmetics and perfumes he could make a profit from;  fortunately a mind as brilliant as hers could do in a few hours the work the rest of the staff had to slave over for weeks.  This left her a great deal of time for her...side projects.

She stopped at the door in the back of the greenhouse, waiting for the red light of the retinal scanner to grant her access.  Only Isley was able to access this room. 

At least until a year ago, when she had modified the scanner to allow in one other person.

Stepping into her personal lab, she frowned at the sight of her erstwhile lab partner washing beakers.  "What's with that prank you pulled at the airport?" she asked irritably.  "That didn't serve any purpose at all."

Jonathan Crane's glasses glinted light back at her, his ice-blue eyes, as usual, so transparent that they became opaque again.  "On the contrary, my dear Pamela.  My first true success with an induced phobia!  Fear of flying is a fairly easy one to trigger, it turns out, but one must start somewhere.  One small step for a phobia, one giant leap for fear, to coin a phrase.  Not something to be mocked, no, not at all."  He smiled beatifically.

Isley grimaced.  She hated the way Crane made her feel uncomfortable, with his creepy, almost mystical fervor.  "Well, next time find some way to make some money off your test runs.  Your rent is due next week."  If she hadn't needed the money so very badly...

Still, Isley had to admit that this last year working with Crane had been very...educational as well.  It was Crane who had taught her that perhaps she had been too limited in focusing on creating plants that could defend themselves physically, that it was time to look at more...psychological methods.  Their research complemented each others' well--Crane studying her plants to work on his toxins, Isley studying his toxins to learn more about how to protect the plants.

She eyed Crane with distaste as he began to mix up a new batch of something cloudy and scarlet, muttering to himself.  The man was motivated by only the coldest, most abstract of passions:  power, knowledge, control.  He had no love in his heart.

Isley ran a finger over the plump, shining leaf of one of her favorite jade plants.  "Who's the prettiest Crassula argentea in the lab?  You are!  Yes, you!" she crooned softly, apologizing as she broke off a bud for genetic analysis.  Love was in her heart like a blooming flower, like a twining vine.  She would use science not to glorify herself, not to gain power for its own sake, but to help the things she loved.  She would be a new Eve tending the Garden of Eden.

Jonathan Crane--like all the human race--was merely a means to that end.
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[info]stalinglim

February 6 2008, 13:31:38 UTC 4 years ago

Poor Kal! Dead amusement park would scare me, too!!!

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:06:30 UTC 4 years ago

Aren't they spooky? I must assume some segment of Gotham society actually takes pride in them and fights to keep them there, but geez...

[info]wachey

February 6 2008, 14:10:52 UTC 4 years ago

Oh boy, this doesn't look good!! Both Ivy and Scarecrow?!

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:07:30 UTC 4 years ago

*grin* Yep! Although Isley is mostly just getting set up for later, I think...she hasn't demanded an active role in this one yet, she's just learning tips for later from Crane. :)

[info]northernwalker

February 6 2008, 14:18:21 UTC 4 years ago

As they walked, Kal could hear it, the low bass beat under it all, steady as a heartbeat but immense beyond human perception. A beat like the steady sound of dripping blood.

When people tell me that being a superhero would be so cool, I'm going to point them at this.

"Clark is okay with Gotham. It's Kal that..."

I think this is one of the differences between Smallville Clark and movieverse Clark, and I like how you catch it. Movieverse Clark is much better integrated, whereas Smallville Clark seems more wary of the Kal-El part of him.

Very good. Dr. Crane continues to give me the creeps!

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:11:31 UTC 4 years ago

When people tell me that being a superhero would be so cool, I'm going to point them at this.

I've always thought that enhanced perceptions would be one of the riskiest powers to have...just a little off and life becomes almost unlivable...

I think this is one of the differences between Smallville Clark and movieverse Clark, and I like how you catch it. Movieverse Clark is much better integrated, whereas Smallville Clark seems more wary of the Kal-El part of him.

Comicverse Superman is mostly Clark to me; Movieverse Superman is mostly Kal at the heart of him, which was such a huge change when I started writing him that I really enjoyed it. In fact, the movieverse Kal seems to have lost touch with Clark sometimes, which is so odd and counter-intuitive that it's fascinating to me...

Dr. Crane is really creepy! He's very hard to predict as a villain because he just likes spreading terror. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

[info]blackrosebard

February 6 2008, 14:23:55 UTC 4 years ago

Hmm. I love the duality in Clark/Kal. He's the one that tends to blur and have less distinction in his separate identities for me.

Bruce continues to be Bat, throughout.

Good point on the park...was a frequent question of mine on the animated series.

Taking Jason Woodrue out of Isley's history surprisingly jarred me. Possibly because I tend to sympathize far too much with her here and there...still. Looking at Crane and her as potential trouble together is intriguing.

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:16:26 UTC 4 years ago

Hmm. I love the duality in Clark/Kal. He's the one that tends to blur and have less distinction in his separate identities for me.

*grin* I think part of the reason I got hooked on writing this series was exactly that the division was so much more severe and distinct. It gave me a lot more to play with. :)

Taking Jason Woodrue out of Isley's history surprisingly jarred me. Possibly because I tend to sympathize far too much with her here and there...still.

I think I'm going to be drawing on a much more animated version of Isley, in part because I want her to stay more on the non-meta side (the Begins movie seems kind of resolutely anti-meta, somehow). But I don't think she becomes Ivy in this arc, and she may well still run into her old professor...

[info]ladybugkay

February 6 2008, 14:27:57 UTC 4 years ago

More Music of the Spheres. *bounces up and down*

Oh, my dear, you have made me so happy by continuing this 'verse. It's something special with probably my very favourite alien!Clark ever.

What I find most intriguing about this chapter, and I suppose, to a certain extent the 'verse itself, is the reversal in expected perceptions. Clark is generally considered the more optimistic of the two men, and Bruce is supposedly the more pessimistic. Idealism vs. cynicism and all that.

Yet, here, it is Clark who sees the shadows and the death and the underside of it all. There is no glass half full for this Clark; it's all bone-dry. And it is Bruce who sees the happy memories. He sees the angel, even if it's dusty, but all Clark, or rather Kal, can see is the coming storm.

I like this flipped perception, this exchange of expected personalities. I like it a lot.

Also, I love Poison Ivy. There's just so much fun to be had with her in fanfic. There's not just sex pollen; she can create clones, cause amnesia, control your mind, do just about anything and everything that makes the DC world cracktastic, but you can use it seriously, too.

I can't wait for more!

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:22:32 UTC 4 years ago

What I find most intriguing about this chapter, and I suppose, to a certain extent the 'verse itself, is the reversal in expected perceptions. Clark is generally considered the more optimistic of the two men, and Bruce is supposedly the more pessimistic. Idealism vs. cynicism and all that.

I know! *cocks head curiously at the fic* I'm not exactly doing it on purpose, either--it's just where the tone tends to go, somehow. It's weird and yet it seems to fit both of the movies, with Bruce being so relatively grounded and Kal so relatively rootless. It's fascinating, and part of the reason why I love S/B--these two are actually like an entirely different pairing than comicverse.

Also, I love Poison Ivy. There's just so much fun to be had with her in fanfic. There's not just sex pollen; she can create clones, cause amnesia, control your mind, do just about anything and everything that makes the DC world cracktastic, but you can use it seriously, too.

*nods a lot* I put her in and immediately thought sex pollen, but...she can do so many things, depending on what version of her she becomes. I'm not sure she's going to become Ivy in this arc, either--I might mostly save her for another arc of her own, lol.

*bounces* Thank you so much for commenting! I'm a bit apprehensive about this arc--not for any real reason, just arc-beginning jitters, I think--so it means a lot to me!

[info]bradygirl_12

February 6 2008, 17:31:53 UTC 4 years ago

Excellent start to a new series, Jen! :)

I agree with [info]ladybugkay about the reversed perceptions. Naturally Bruce would have happier memories of a place he grew up in, just as Clark would with Smallville.

I do love Clark in his 'ridiculous' outfit (a pompom!) and love Bruce's awareness of what's underneath the silliness. :) It's a favorite theme of mine: what is truly under bumbling Clark or suave Bruce or efficient Diana Prince.

I happen to find Ivy a fascinating villain. I know she's a bad girl and hurts people along the way for her beloved plants, but I can't feel too angry at a woman who loves trees and plants (that is so my thing!) and creates sex pollen to boot! ;)

The Scarecrow is a great character. These two working together will be trouble for our boys!

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:29:58 UTC 4 years ago

Naturally Bruce would have happier memories of a place he grew up in, just as Clark would with Smallville.

I think I have to get this version of Bruce and Clark back to Smallville sometime! Bruce has only been there once in the series, and Clark really needs to re-connect there...maybe the next arc can be more Smallville-oriented. ;)

I do love Clark in his 'ridiculous' outfit (a pompom!) and love Bruce's awareness of what's underneath the silliness. :) It's a favorite theme of mine: what is truly under bumbling Clark or suave Bruce or efficient Diana Prince.

Isn't it a great theme? I love it so much...and I love that Bruce is possessive of that side that almost only he knows about.

I can't feel too angry at a woman who loves trees and plants (that is so my thing!) and creates sex pollen to boot! ;)

Ivy's a very cool and flexible character...I don't think she's going to come into her own until later, but she demanded to get included here learning her tips from Crane. :)

[info]dm_wyatt

February 6 2008, 17:54:58 UTC 4 years ago Edited:  February 6 2008, 17:55:18 UTC

Awesome new story!

I haven't read too many with Poison Ivy but she's going to be the source of a lot of H/C I'm guessing, so I'm all for it.

The ominious feelings of dread that Clark, or Kal, got from the abandoned amusement park seems like foreshadowing to me, nevermind that all Bruce saw were his childhood memories...

I can't wait for more, especially since I loved the Music of the Spheres 'verse.

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:33:40 UTC 4 years ago

I haven't read too many with Poison Ivy but she's going to be the source of a lot of H/C I'm guessing, so I'm all for it.

In fanon, Ivy is usually a character who drops sex pollen and runs. *grin* (In my stories too!) I don't think Isley will take a really active role in this one, but she's in training for another possible arc, at least. :)

The ominious feelings of dread that Clark, or Kal, got from the abandoned amusement park seems like foreshadowing to me, nevermind that all Bruce saw were his childhood memories...

Kal and Gotham's relationship is always a thorny issue, even if Bruce doesn't really want to admit it. *nods* It'll crop back up.

Thanks so much for reading and commenting! The next two chapters are pretty much ready to go...*looks nervous*

[info]dm_wyatt

4 years ago

[info]medie

February 6 2008, 18:00:14 UTC 4 years ago

Ooooooh. I love Clark's description of Gotham. It's so perfectly appropriate! And Ivy and Crane are both lurking about the place now? *GLEE*

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:37:16 UTC 4 years ago

Can you believe the section about Gotham's song was written dead last? I had a really uninspiring beginning and was throwing a fit about it, and my beta said, "Well, since there's supposed to be some reference to music in this series here and there, why not have Kal listening to Gotham's song?" And yay, I had an opening scene at last! :)

Crane's going to be trouble, and Ivy is waiting her turn to have a grudge, I think...and learning some tips on neurobiology...

Thanks so much for reading and commenting and encouraging! *grin*

[info]sorrelchestnut

February 6 2008, 18:54:43 UTC 4 years ago

I am so happy to see more of this series.

Also, I love Ivy in this. You did a beautiful job of portraying the sympathetic viewpoint that often gets lost when she's a psycho killer. She's not doing this for revenge, or power, or just plain craziness: she wants what's best for the things she loves. Like any good parent. Who kills.

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:39:46 UTC 4 years ago

Also, I love Ivy in this. You did a beautiful job of portraying the sympathetic viewpoint that often gets lost when she's a psycho killer. She's not doing this for revenge, or power, or just plain craziness: she wants what's best for the things she loves. Like any good parent. Who kills.

Ivy is one of those villains that I just can't help, as an ardent environmentalist, having some sympathy with. It's fun to try and get in her head and just imagine that she cares about plants as passionately and deeply as Superman or Batman care about people, which motivates her very differently from someone like Crane (whose head so far I simply cannot get into, lol...)

[info]loqia

February 6 2008, 20:09:57 UTC 4 years ago

I've had too little sleep and too many boring project management lectures so you'll just have to excuse my reaction...

OMGOMGOMGMOTSOMGOGMOMGOMGOGMOGMG!!!!!1 \:O/

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:43:24 UTC 4 years ago

*grins* Yay! Thank you for the encouragement, as I'm having arc-beginning jitters on this one (usually they wait until I'm near the end of an arc, wth...). But I love these two and I'm happy to get back to a full arc with them, so...here's hoping for the best. :)

[info]loqia

4 years ago

[info]reecey_boy

February 6 2008, 20:56:33 UTC 4 years ago

Ooh!

This isn't going to end well... Maybe better than it could end, but it's going to get really bad.

Excellent.

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:45:20 UTC 4 years ago

*grins* Fear toxin is a narrative toy I've never played with, and I'm having some fun with it so far! (And I haven't even gotten to the bad bits yet, lol). *rubs hands* Hope you like where it goes!

[info]starsandsea

February 6 2008, 20:56:35 UTC 4 years ago

Eeeeeeee!!!! MotS!!!!! MotS!!!!! *dances*

Sirens and screeching brakes like violins, punctuating the beat like a stab wound. Conversation like a low and muttering choir, moving to the rhythm unawares. It was under everything, an inexorable sound of blood and fate, each beat another step toward mortality. Gotham's song, a nocturne of entropy.

*hearts Gotham* Why don't I have a Gotham icon?!?!?

(But Kal still heard the city singing).

*hugs Kal gently*

He looked entirely ridiculous, and as usual the knowledge of what was walking next to him, wrapped in eiderdown and gore-tex, warmed Bruce with possessive delight.

Hee! *pets Bruce*

His partner reached out and slipped his mittened hands between Bruce's gloved fingers, tense on his knees. "I'm sorry," Clark said, as he always did when something bad happened that he hadn't stopped.

*hugs Clark gently*

He smiled slightly, feeling his city hovering near them, an angel with dusty wings.

Oh. *hearts Gotham again*

Clark's eyes remained almost glassy. "This city," he muttered. "It frightens me sometimes."

*hugs Clark again*

"So then, I gather you're not interested in exploring the Tunnel of Love?" Bruce asked.

Clark's eyes were mischievous. "Not here, no."


*giggles* *pets them both*

Ooooh, I love your Pamela's voice! I can't wait to see what havoc she and Crane mix up!

More soon? *puppy dog eyes*

[info]jij

February 6 2008, 23:47:59 UTC 4 years ago

*hearts Gotham* Why don't I have a Gotham icon?!?!?

I've asked DaMo to make a Bruce/Gotham OTP icon, but so far no luck. :)

Eeee, you picked out some of my favorite lines, especially Clark apologizing for anything bad that happens and the "angel with dusty wings" one. *hearts you*

The next two chapters are written and in beta at the moment, almost ready to go. So it shouldn't be too long a wait! *bounces* Thank you so much for reading and quoting and encouraging!

[info]jij

4 years ago

[info]smgriffin

February 6 2008, 21:04:35 UTC 4 years ago

o.o

Well, I suppose I can find relief in the fact Ivy doesn't think of Crane as Adam. That would be one rather creepy Eden.

[info]jij

February 7 2008, 23:32:29 UTC 4 years ago

*grin* She's been working on pheremones and I suggested to her that she try them out on Crane, and she was like, "Ew. Not the ones that deal with sex at all. Ew." So she tends to agree with you...fortunately for my brain. :)

[info]samibee

February 6 2008, 21:26:49 UTC 4 years ago

*jumps up and down and squees in delight* More MOS!! Even nuttier is last night I was re-reading the first arc, so this is like awesome timing :D Love Bruce's happier memories of the boardwalk, his father winning him a gotham knights shirt. And also, jonathan Crane ooo! I always did love his character in Begins, Cillian Murphy was so freakin creepy lol! cant wait to see what he and poison ivy get up to :D

[info]jij

February 7 2008, 23:39:04 UTC 4 years ago

Eek! *hides from your icon*

As someone says in another comment, a Bruce that can actually enjoy Amusement Mile is a very odd and young Bruce indeed...I have so much fun with movieverse for little things like that. And I'm happy to have Crane knocking around again...I've never written fear toxin, so I'm having fun with it!

[info]greeneyelove

February 6 2008, 22:06:26 UTC 4 years ago

Oh what a pair. Crane and Ivy. I'm hooked.

[info]jij

February 8 2008, 01:07:52 UTC 4 years ago

Crane and Ivy seem very well-matched in their backgrounds at least! Two evil biochemists against the world... :) Ivy so far has been planning on staying in the background and has been hinting she deserves an arc of her own, so we shall see... ;)

Anonymous

February 6 2008, 22:21:46 UTC 4 years ago

Hmmm... Sex pollen plus Superman/Batman or Bruce/Clark. I look forward to it with you writing it. :P

Angeloz

[info]jij

February 8 2008, 01:08:55 UTC 4 years ago

*grin* I think the sex pollen will mostly be later...I'm not sure Isley perfects the formula in this arc and I think she's demaning an arc of her own. :) But she's working on it, oh yes she is...

[info]ranlynn

February 7 2008, 03:25:39 UTC 4 years ago

Let's see...Poisen Ivy *and* Scarecrow?

The boys are going to have their work cut out for them (especially with 'Kals' fear of Gothem).

[info]jij

February 8 2008, 01:16:48 UTC 4 years ago

*grin* They're going to definitely have some issues to deal with, indeed...*pets Kal* Thanks so much for commenting!

[info]ladymordecai

February 7 2008, 05:47:50 UTC 4 years ago

OhmyGodOhmyGodohmyGod. Amusement Mile in Gotham, just--it's HARD for me to separate it from the vision of blood and death and terror that came into my head, because that's what it would BE if it existed in comics-canon. I was genuinely startled for a moment that Bruce could smile in a place that might hold clowns.

I know, I know this is MotS and based on the movies besides, here there has been no evil Clown King of Crime, but--let's just say it colored my reading of the chapter.

In other news, SQUEE!! New MotS!!

I love that Kal is sort of the wrong frequency for Gotham, and that he couldn't seem to bring Clark--who is comfortable in the city--to the fore. Bruce and Kal's different views of the abandoned amusement park were lovely. The implied closeness of the two of them just walking together is wonderful.

Also looking forward to where you bring this . . . Isley, Crane and Stagg, arrayed. It should be interesting. Especially Crane, with his whole manipulation of fears thing. One wonders about Kryptonian reaction to his toxins.

[info]jij

February 8 2008, 01:56:21 UTC 4 years ago

I was genuinely startled for a moment that Bruce could smile in a place that might hold clowns.

I totally agree with you, Bruce startled me there! It's funny because I kind of assume the events of "Dark Knight" have happened in this world, but still...the Joker's sense of horror develops more and more over the years...

The implied closeness of the two of them just walking together is wonderful.

Mmm, thank you, I really liked the image of them taking casual, quiet strolls together myself.

One wonders about Kryptonian reaction to his toxins.

One does indeed. *grins and runs back to write more*

[info]goldenrat84

February 7 2008, 09:44:29 UTC 4 years ago

Poison Ivy teamed up with Jonathan Crane, that really is a compatible match (in a bad guy, intending to betray each other, kind of way.

[info]jij

February 8 2008, 01:59:21 UTC 4 years ago

They have such similar trainings and backgrounds in biochemistry that she seemed a natural fit for someone to shelter him, help him, and learn from him. :) They're creepy-fun together...

[info]chained_blunt

February 9 2008, 04:46:42 UTC 4 years ago

the part of The Music of the Spheres!!!!

*tackle u*

jeeeeennnnnnnn!!!!!!i adore uuuuuu~~~~~~~~~~~~~love ya~~~!!!!!!

thank u 4 this story!!!

[info]jij

February 10 2008, 23:34:09 UTC 4 years ago

You're very welcome and I should have more up soon, I hope! I'm hoping to get a little more caught up before I post another story...

[info]saavikam77

February 9 2008, 21:02:04 UTC 4 years ago

Oooohh!! *shivers* O_O

The effect with the abandoned amusement park and boardwalk was just downright *creepy*! Foreshadowing, perhaps?

And Crane working with Isley. Not good at all. O_O

So glad you're starting the next arc in this! :D Bravo!!!

[info]jij

February 11 2008, 01:52:45 UTC 4 years ago

The effect with the abandoned amusement park and boardwalk was just downright *creepy*! Foreshadowing, perhaps?

*grin* I suspect the final fight of the arc takes place there, actually...

And Crane and Isley (not Crane/Isley, eek!) are a lot of fun to write! *dances* I hope you enjoy!

[info]dandette

February 10 2008, 05:36:28 UTC 4 years ago

Okay, so this is a simplified version of what was going through my mind:

YAY MORE MotS! Oooh, Gotham's song. Those boys are so darn cute. Hm, that plane crash sure doesn't sound good. D'aw, poor Kal...
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OMG CRANE AND ISLEY?! Oh, crap. Oh, crap. Oh, crap. Oh, HELL YES!

Soooo in other words, I am feeling quite gleeful at the moment. Also, you rock. :D

[info]jij

February 11 2008, 09:08:12 UTC 4 years ago

OMG CRANE AND ISLEY?! Oh, crap. Oh, crap. Oh, crap. Oh, HELL YES!

*happy snickers*

Isley's in training for her own arc, but I'm enjoying having her around to keep an eye on Crane, whose POV I just can't seem to get into at all. :/

Glad to make you gleeful! Writing this series always fills me with glee as well...so I'm happy to share. :)

[info]arch_schatten

February 18 2008, 06:47:46 UTC 4 years ago

*runs around catching up* Hi! MotS! yay! Feargas, yesssss!

I loved the into of this chapter, I'm glad you managed to get it to your liking. Gotham in this whole chapter sounds absolutely delicious and a scary, scary dichotomy. It's an invisible city!

He tried not to resent how Bruce's steps fell naturally into the song's tempo, tried to match Bruce's stride, to fit himself into the measure.

This bit, along with the song of entropy, made me swoon. I love the idea of a Bruce who's so attuned with his mortality in this level, and not only Bruce, but a whole city. It's... beautiful in a terrible way.

There's (here I go in a tangent) theory of design that says buildings -whole cities, even- must be designed taking into account their destruction, so that their ruins too will be beautiful. Your Gotham certainly seems to have that going.

With a jolt as if a circuit were thrown in his brain, Bruce suddenly saw the area as Clark must see it: the rides filled with ominous shadows, the silence and emptiness like the moment before a scream, everything desolate and abandoned. Empty.

And then there's this! how Gotham really looks out of context. The fact that Clark wants to fit in and sort of does makes me sad for Kal.. it seems to me that his more 'human' side is mortal, and if it is entwined to Gotham, it might be destroyed before Kal himself is :( I'm sure it won't happen, but you know, the possibility is there!

Empty amusement parks are creepy... but I'm in love with the double vision here. Mroowwww (multitasker ferret! puppetry and commenting!)

[info]jij

February 18 2008, 08:02:38 UTC 4 years ago

This bit, along with the song of entropy, made me swoon. I love the idea of a Bruce who's so attuned with his mortality in this level, and not only Bruce, but a whole city.

Eeeee, I knew you'd love that line, and then Dan picked it out during beta and said "Mina will love that line," so...I'm happy you love the line, lol!

There's (here I go in a tangent) theory of design that says buildings -whole cities, even- must be designed taking into account their destruction, so that their ruins too will be beautiful. Your Gotham certainly seems to have that going.

My God, architectural theory and philosphy is just the most fascinating thing. That's amazing! I love it!

And yeah, if the muses will play with me right the whole theme of mortality as a necessary thing, the beautiful ruins humans are designed to fall into, should be running underneath this arc. Clark appreciates that about Gotham, but yes, the Kal who doesn't have those ruins or those heartbeats taking him closer to death every beat is really alien to Gotham. The funny thing is I side with Gotham here, despite Kal's fear of it, and I hope I can get him to make some peace with her by the end.

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<i>This bit, along with the song of entropy, made me swoon. I love the idea of a Bruce who's so attuned with his mortality in this level, and not only Bruce, but a whole city.</i>

Eeeee, I knew you'd love that line, and then Dan picked it out during beta and said "Mina will love that line," so...I'm happy you love the line, lol!

<i>There's (here I go in a tangent) theory of design that says buildings -whole cities, even- must be designed taking into account their destruction, so that their ruins too will be beautiful. Your Gotham certainly seems to have that going.</i>

My God, architectural theory and philosphy is just the most fascinating thing. That's amazing! I love it!

And yeah, if the muses will play with me right the whole theme of mortality as a necessary thing, the beautiful ruins humans are designed to fall into, should be running underneath this arc. Clark appreciates that about Gotham, but yes, the Kal who doesn't have those ruins or those heartbeats taking him closer to death every beat is really alien to Gotham. The funny thing is I side with Gotham here, despite Kal's fear of it, and I hope I can get him to make some peace with her by the end.

<i<Empty amusement parks are creepy... but I'm in love with the double vision here. Mroowwww (multitasker ferret! puppetry and commenting!)</i>

Exploring WHY Bruce loves Gotham is always fascinating to me! Because it has to be an honest and a real reason, despite all the strangeness of Gotham...

Your multitasking fills me with glee! ;)

[info]taro_twist

February 24 2008, 01:25:53 UTC 4 years ago

Whoaa--Isley/Crane team-up! And Simon Stagg, too? It's a villainous trifecta!

Also, I love how you keep coming back to music with each MotS arc. :D And the idea of Gotham having a nocturne of entropy! *swoon* The way you write it, Gotham really is the epitome of embracing chaos and destruction, but in a really beautiful way.

All of your descriptions were so evocative, as always XD--the amusement park, the joggers, Clark looking adorkably ridiculous. =P And these lines were made of win:

Sirens and screeching brakes like violins, punctuating the beat like a stab wound. Conversation like a low and muttering choir, moving to the rhythm unawares.

I love listening to noise and making out how it has it's own kind of music to it, so I adore the idea of Clark doing that, especially since he has such sensitive hearing. Also, with Kal first hearing celestial music and now hearing Gotham's underlying beat, I'm beginning to think one of his powers in MotS should be "hearing the music that supposedly inaminate things ... make" LOL. But better phrased than that =P

Ahh, and the amusement park! The shift in Bruce's perception after Clark brought up how scary it was was really jarring--I could totally feel it as he emerged from this sort of sepia-toned nostalgia and had reality crash down around him. Eeee, creepy! And Stagg owns the park? *is very intrigued*

Also, loved this part:

Love was in her heart like a blooming flower, like a twining vine. She would use science not to glorify herself, not to gain power for its own sake, but to help the things she loved. She would be a new Eve tending the Garden of Eden.

I have a feeling I'm totally going to fall for your Pam. XD

Whee! Yay MotS!

[info]jij

February 24 2008, 14:49:09 UTC 4 years ago

Whoaa--Isley/Crane team-up! And Simon Stagg, too? It's a villainous trifecta!

Isley and Stagg are mostly going to stay in the background--I might be setting Isley up for a future arc, depending on how well she behaves here. :) She's fun, though! I've never really written her, beyond showing up to deliver sex pollen, lol...

Also, I love how you keep coming back to music with each MotS arc. :D And the idea of Gotham having a nocturne of entropy! *swoon* The way you write it, Gotham really is the epitome of embracing chaos and destruction, but in a really beautiful way.

Eeeee...*dances* Thank you! Believe it or not, the music came in really late. I was like three chapters in and fretting because there didn't seem to be any theme, and DaMo was like, "Where'd the music theme go?" and it clicked and got everything moving well! Yay!

I love listening to noise and making out how it has it's own kind of music to it, so I adore the idea of Clark doing that, especially since he has such sensitive hearing. Also, with Kal first hearing celestial music and now hearing Gotham's underlying beat, I'm beginning to think one of his powers in MotS should be "hearing the music that supposedly inaminate things ... make" LOL. But better phrased than that =P

LOL! It does seem to be something he's actually able to do, doesn't it? I'm still a bit up in the air on how literal and how metaphorical Gotham's music is, but I think for Kal those two terms aren't quite easily divided, somehow...

The shift in Bruce's perception after Clark brought up how scary it was was really jarring--I could totally feel it as he emerged from this sort of sepia-toned nostalgia and had reality crash down around him.

It was really hard to find what Bruce would love about those old places, but I do think he has to, deep in his heart, however creepy they may be. He really loves all of Gotham, good and bad, which is just one of the amazing things about him...

*hugs* Eee, thank you for commenting! You've made my night, and it needed some making, lol.

[info]ayamemishi

March 1 2008, 05:49:06 UTC 4 years ago

Usually I try and leave a comment when I catch up with stories, but now I'm just so excited by the prospect of Ivy and Scarecrow!

I must sound like such a loser saying this, but I've managed to read everything up in this series, to this point, within about...6 hours. I just love it.

[info]jij

March 1 2008, 14:10:35 UTC 4 years ago

Awwww....*blushes* Thank you so much, I'm really overwhelmed. And glad you like it! It's become my favorite series, without a doubt...
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